Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible, while others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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of individuals consider that
children
should start school education at earlier
ages
, whilst others suppose that
children
must
to
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relax
at
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childhood
. It is evidenced that some people are related to study
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an
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early
ages
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but some people are not possible to do it.
This
essay will discuss ways of coping with
problem
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the problem
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of
children
education .
Firstly
, all kids should have a good
childhood
that will be remembered in memories for whole life, because
this
stage of life is full of
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remarkable moments. Scientists proved that people’s imagination and creativity skills start
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their
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development at 4-5
ages
.
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Children
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Child
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A child
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who
have
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a lot of free time can research all edges of our world.
For instance
, I can provide my
childhood
which was very interesting because my parents gave me to the school at 6 years old. But in
this
way
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there is the chance that
kid
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kids
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stars
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start
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to hang out with
bad
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a bad
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group of people.
On the other hand
, little students can be
more smart
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at earlier
ages
and get ahead of their peers.
In
addition
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this
student will be younger than their classmates and
this
infant can start job life earlier and can earn money at young
ages
.
For instance
, Bill Gates went to his one teacher at 4-5 years.
However
, it is extremely difficult to study at early
ages
for
children
, at
this
years
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babies brain is not enough developed. In conclusion, I believe that every
children
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should have
own
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their own
his own
her own
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interesting
childhood
. In
this
way
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kid’s imagination and creativity skills will be greater.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social interactions
  • Formative years
  • Curiosity
  • Structured environments
  • Preschool activities
  • Unstructured play
  • Developmental pace
  • Emotional and social skills
  • Undue stress and pressure
  • Natural development
  • Informal learning methods
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