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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the internet. While the internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted.

#students #internet #effects #purposes
In recent years,
students
 have become more
depending
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 on the
internet
. Despite the fact how the
internet
 is suitable, it has many disadvantages that should become minimized in the use of the educational purpose. From my perspective, I strongly agree with
this
 statement for the following reasons that will be discussed.
To begin
, there are several crucial drawbacks from using the
internet
 without
restrict
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,
students
 extremely rely on the
internet
 searching for information’s which cause the effective way of learning by going to the library and knowing how to read books and searching manually.
In other words
, it affects the learning strategy by leading some
students
.
Moreover
, studies show that going to libraries
not
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 like it used to be in the past few years. Another reason that
internet
 should be restricted is that
,
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 some school they record classes and
then
students
 can watch them back anytime which cause less interact with
students
 and teachers,
for instance
 as a teacher I realized some of my
students
 could not concentrate on online classes even though some is
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 meeting,
although
 it was effective but not as when
students
 attend the class and interact with the teacher and other classmates.
In Addition
 to that,
student
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the student
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 has become less social because they find it easy to contact each other via
e- mail
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 than talk to each other.
On the other
hand
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internet
 has become the most powerful
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 in the educational system,
for example
, when all the
students
 around global could not attend school due to the pandemic (Covid 19), it has the most powerful impact not only
in
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educational
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 system
,
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 but
also
 it benefits many different levels in our lives. To conclude,
However
internet
 is
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educational learning , In my point of view I believe
internet
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 should be limited for the three main reasons
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  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
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  • problem-solving
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  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
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