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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and example to support your position.

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Learning a foreign language at the same time students start school is quite too late. Many
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 say that human brains can be best developed at the age of five, which means before schooling.
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 your children to have bilingual, you shouldn't wait until they are six years old and get into school. At the age of five or less than,
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scientists
 have proved that the connection between neurons in our
brain
 have not fixed yet, and they still be able to rearrange themselves. When people
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 new information, the neuron in
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head
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 will move to connect to others. After we get older, we hardly make those connections since they are already stable. In another word, that organization in
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brain
 causes
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 to learn new knowledge,
esspecially
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especially
 foreign language. Studying new languages requires a
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 memory, as to
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communicate
 with other people you need
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enough words stored in your mind.
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, people who prefer learning a new language have to prepare a
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 size of space in the
brain
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 as young as
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possible
 because children obviously have enormous space in the
brain
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