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illustrates internet users in three countries from 1999 to 2009.

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The given line graph demonstrates statistical information about the proportion of
internet
 users in three different countries namely the USA, Canada and Mexico, between the period of ten years, from 1999 to 2009. Overall, it is clearly apparent from the graph that these nations had experienced a gradual increase in using the
internet
.
To begin
 with, the number of
internet
 users in Mexico from 1999 to 2001 was the lowest with about 5%, after these years the figure grew to about 40% in 2009 among Mexican people.
In contrast
, the number of users in both countries Canada and the USA was the highest rate of the
internet
 usage among its citizens, during the three
first
 years the proportion of increased started from 5% to reach at 25% in the
third
 year,
afterward
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, the proportion kept increasing to highest rate with about 100%.
however
, the difference between the percentage of use between Canada and USA was smaller while in comparison to Mexico the difference was bigger.
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