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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Most
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 would agree that car ownership has increased in recent years and
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 is causing a range of problems. In
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 essay, I will describe these problems and suggest solutions that could help solve them. Traffic jam is a common problem of all big cities. When you drive,
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, to the city
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 because of an appointment there, it could be uncertain would you be late or not.
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, when you reach your destination there could be no accessible parking, and you would be driving some extra time to look for a vacant parking place. It is worth mentioning that big cities have air pollution problems that are
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 related to congestion. One of the best approaches governments can take is to encourage
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 to
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 public
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. It could include
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 measures as dedicated lanes for public
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, comfortable public vehicles, and affordable prices. Buses, trams, and trains are good ways of getting around, and if they are cheap and reliable,
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 will
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 them. Another approach to discourage
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 from using their cars is to establish expensive parking in the downtown and at the same time, free parking on the outskirts.
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 would make
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 leave their own vehicles at the car parks and change to public
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.
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 to
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 bicycles
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 of cars. Building a bicycle path that allows getting around in any direction would help attract many
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 who prefer more eco-friendly
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. To sum up, traffic jam is an issue resulting from a higher amount of
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 owning a car. Some measures might be taken by the government to encourage
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 to
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 public transportation and bicycles
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 of their own cars.
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