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Some people think job satisfaction is more important than job security. But others believe that people cannot always enjoy their jobs and having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some
people
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 prefer to enjoy their
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 rather than other things
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 as
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 output has less importance for them.
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, others believe that the main purpose should be
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 security. I partially agree with both viewpoints in some aspects. On the one hand, the occupation is a primary
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 of our
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 and most adult
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 have to work over 8 hours in a day
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 almost one-
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 of their whole time.
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, we should be happy with our occupation and
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 satisfaction might be prioritized. Because if
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 are enthusiastic about their
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 not only increase the rate of happiness in their
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 and in society
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 but
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 rise their efficiency that it would beneficial for their
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 as well as economy.
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, in contemporary times,
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 have to work for money because in modern
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 humans ought to have money to tackle their needs like accommodation or even food. Thereby, income can be considered as the most important
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 of working in terms of boosting their economic situation.
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, permanent jobs are significant as well as payment especially for those who are responsible to others
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 as parents that are in charge of their families. To conclude,
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 satisfaction is a significant
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 of their
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, salary and security are a noticeable
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 of
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's occupation as well in terms of new social lifestyle in recent years. So, in my idea, all aspects of a
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 need the same consideration and these have not outweighed in comparison.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Job Satisfaction**: Fulfillment, pleasure, gratification, contentment, happiness at work, engaging work, meaningful work, passionate career.
  • 2. **Job Security**: Stability, permanence, steady income, financial security, long-term employment, dependable employment, stability in the workplace.
  • 3. **Work-Life Balance**: Equilibrium, harmonious work-life, time management, personal time, family time, balance between professional and personal life.
  • 4. **Mental Health**: Well-being, psychological health, stress reduction, emotional health, workplace happiness.
  • 5. **Professional Growth**: Career advancement, skill development, learning opportunities, professional development, personal growth.
  • 6. **Economic Conditions**: Job market, employment rates, economic stability, financial climate, recession, economic downturn.
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