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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is said that, in a
country
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 where speaking a foreign
language
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 is compulsory, immigrants are faced with various problems in society. I strongly agree with
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 statement because of some main reasons.
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, speaking a
country
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language
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 would help people to communicate with local dwellers. Communication not only helps foreigners to make friends but
also
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 their social life. In
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other word,
lack
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a lack
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 of friendship
lead
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 to feeling
loneliness
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of loneliness
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.
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, a person living in a new
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, when attending a party is less likely to experience joyful moments
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, he
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 understand completely what others talk about
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,
he
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 fails to participate in their discussion.
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 speaking a local
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play
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 an important role in socializing.
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, it is
undeniable
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 fact that speaking a foreign
language
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 has essential effects on daily life. In fact, in several situations during
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 day without knowing the
language
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 of that area one probably would get in trouble. To illustrate it, when a person goes shopping and cannot explain the specific products which he wants
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the seller may make a mistake and give him the wrong goods.
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, immigrants have to learn the
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 of their destination
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 to live easily and do their work in the best way. Some may argue that
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overseas one can speak with own
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 and translate it with some applications to convey his requests,
while
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 in
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 way it would be really arduous
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local
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locals
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accept
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 them in their community. In conclusion, I believe conversation skills with foreign languages contribute to creating close-knit relationships for communication and
do
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 other tasks that are necessary for living properly.
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coherence cohesion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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