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Smart phones is able to do everything. Explain its functions and limitations.

#phones #functions #limitations
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Today’s world is completely converted into digital life.
People
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 prefer to have mobile
phones
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 as a company rather than each other. There are some good points for using a phone and bad things as well just like
coin
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a coin
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 has two sides. A
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smartphone
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smart phone
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smartphone
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 contains plethora
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 with the
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 of technology. Phone can completely replace the computer in every kind of possible
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. It has
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a feature
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 called Adobe reader, in which we can edit or convert the PDF file into any other application and scan as well.
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,
people
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 can
use
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 social media
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 to stay connected with everyone even though they are very far from each other. They can do audio calls, video calls, text and send pictures as well.
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, there are some applications from they can organise
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a meeting
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meeting
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meetings
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 with clients without going workplace. If
people
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 start learning, they can do anything from anywhere before reaching
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place
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the place
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. Like they can pay their bills
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 one click of their mobile
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.
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, there may have chances to overuse
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phones
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 and spoil the career of their children.
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 is one kind of addiction proved for them to distract focus from studies because it includes so many applications of games, which are not good for the student life. If
people
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use
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 too much,
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 their eyes may get hurt because of the light of the screen and the distance between eyes and
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. In conclusion,
people
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 must be enough mature to keep
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phones
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, so they have
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a proper
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 sense that when to
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use
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, how much time it is good to
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 and important
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 to
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use
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.
In addition
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,
people
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 can
use
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properly
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it properly
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, so it is very much helpful to save time and much more energy
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without
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 getting harm.
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