Some people say that the purpose of education is to be useful to the society while others argue that the purpose of education is to fulfill personal ambitions of an individual

Education
always had
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role in social life. Some people claim that the goal of getting knowledge is to be
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society
, others,
however
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education
is for personal purposes.
This
essay agrees that the final purpose of
education
is to be useful for
society
because it accelerates a country's development. Many disagree with the opinion that
education
should be for social development.
This
type of
education
teaches a
person
to increase their profit and it is not useful for the public. To go into detail, many developing countries take care of skilled individuals who have graduated from
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university.
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, they
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to be less disciplined and they are not willing to obey the rules.
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, many of those who moved to
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governmental programs do not return to their homeland.
This
is the result of pursuing their personal ambitions.
On the other hand
, if
education
becomes more
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, it positively affects the community’s life and the
society
will become more civilized.
This
is because the
person
is learning the things that are beneficial for
society
. By doing
this
, the
person
is aware of the rules and is less prone to breaking laws.
For example
, in Asian countries,
such
as Japan, the final goal of
education
is to raise a nice
person
. From
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they are taught how to behave in public and how to obey rules.
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,
education
should be
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oriented. Taking everything into account,
education
which is aimed to develop a responsible citizen makes
society
more civilized and affects the country’s development positively as well, while teaching based on individual ambitions will improve only their life. If
education
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social
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oriented, the community and the country will become more civilized.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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