In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?

It is with no doubt that the credit for the advancement of human civilization from the stone age to the digital era that we live in today can be accounted to the developments in science and
technology
.
However
, our intellectual development can only be attributed to myriad
art
forms
be it in the past or present.
Technology
may have made homo sapiens superior to any living being on earth but it is unequivocal that it is
art
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makes us all humane. Regions across the world are united by ballads , different kinds of dance
forms
, exemplary literature etc .
Although
we all be significantly different from one another , we all come together to appreciate the beauty of
art
as
art
and its beauty is universal . The benefits bestowed on us by
technology
may be numerous
such
as it has made cross country trade easier , communication faster , developed social standards in general
although
what still remains in
this
modern era is the primitive
art
forms
which dates back to millions of years ago and still holds its place in today’s world.
Art
makes us ponder on various issues
such
as misery , love , genocide ,beauty etc which makes us rethink our whole values which
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the whole basis of our existence . A presentation on World War II may be made available by a desktop and transmitted to a wide range of people via the internet
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the statistics of the number of people who died and the places
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where each mishap happened can be stated as facts
However
in order to invoke in the minds of people the feelings of hardships and suffering that was faced by those Jews back
then
could only be conveyed maybe by a film , a musical composition or a book written on it.
Therefore
as much as we can go on and on about how
technology
has transformed the way how we live what we must not forget is that it is
art
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makes us stay grounded to our roots from where we came from and makes living worthwhile.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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