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In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

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In recent years, we do see a positive change in how flexible ‘family’ as a social institution has emerged. The social stigma surrounding adoption, surrogacy, divorce, late marriage,
child-less
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 marriage is getting less importance in liberal urban
neighborhoods
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. We see the role of men changing from just being the breadwinner to
also
an
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 equal parent to the
children
 at home. Both the sexes combine their expertise to run the household smoothly. The decisions at home involve
children
,
elderly
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, the man and the woman of the house. The filo-centric approach to manage affairs
have
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children
 at the forefront. The
children
 participate, negotiate and alter decisions due to access to knowledge through
internet
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. There are
also
single parent
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 families which are functioning if a woman decides not to marry but have a child.
Additionally
, live-in relationships are common among working professionals in the cities.
This
 could turn negative financially or legally if the couple decides to
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. Overall, we do see changes both positive and negative. In rural as well as urban family structures change due to migration for work, study or marriage.
Although
, nuclear and joint family
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structures
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 are more common than the rest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual-income
  • gender roles
  • single-parent households
  • divorce rates
  • same-sex parents
  • multigenerational
  • family dynamics
  • aging population
  • communication technology
  • child-rearing approaches
  • work-life balance
  • remote working
  • family structure
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