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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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tourism
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 industry has contributed to the economic development of many
countries
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 , but often faces some issues as well and
difference
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the difference
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 between
customs
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 and
behaviors
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 of
tourists
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 and natives is
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 of
such
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 issues. While
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 school of thought agrees that local
customs
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 and
behaviors
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 should be followed,
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the other
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other
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another
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one
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 believes that foreign
culture
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 should be welcomed. In
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 essay, I will discuss both
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views followed by mine. Every
country
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 has its own
customs
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, beliefs and
behaviors
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behaviours
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 which are imbibed in its citizens and
thus
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, citizens are accustomed to
behave
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 in a certain way. When
people
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 of
one
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country
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visit
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 another
country
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, they tend to continue their native
behavior
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behaviour
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. Many believe that
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 is not ideal when visiting a foreign
country
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. They believe that local
customs
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 and
norms
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 should be followed because of a number of reasons.
To begin
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 with, when
tourists
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visit
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 another
country
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,
such
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 native
customs
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 and conduct
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are
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 more acceptable to the local
people
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 and
thus
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,
tourists
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 would not face any problems adjusting to the new place.
For instance
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, if
one
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 knows how to eat food using chopsticks, they would be able to enjoy their meals more comfortably in
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 like China or Japan.
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, natives
also
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 welcome
tourists
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 who are well versed with their
culture
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 and
hence
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,
tourists
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 would not feel unwelcome and in some worse cases, hostile.
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,
tourists
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 wearing short clothes in a religious place may offend the locals, if they are not aware of the local
norms
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.
Therefore
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,
people
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 should try to learn and follow
native
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the native
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cultures
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 and beliefs of the
host
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country
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 to have a comfortable and joyous tour.
On the other hand
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, many believe that cultural differences should be acceptable by the
host
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country
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 owing to many reasons.
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,
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 of the goals of
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tourism
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the tourism
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 industry is to promote cultural inclusion and diversity which cannot be achieved if
tourists
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 are forced to follow
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host
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the host
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country
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’s
customs
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.
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, in India, many
people
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 have learned to speak English so that they can communicate with
tourists
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, and
thus
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 promoting literacy in India.
This
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 would not have been possible if
tourists
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 were asked to learn and speak Hindi while visiting India.
Secondly
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,
this
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 trend
also
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 helps
people
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 to learn about other
cultures
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 and sometimes
adapt
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adopt
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 some good things of a particular
culture
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.
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,
people
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 do not litter in other
countries
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 where littering is banned and
people
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 are fined if found littering.
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 of
this
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,
tourists
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 do not litter in their own
country
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 as they believe that
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 is not a good practice.
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, not everyone can be forced to follow a local norm because every individual has their own likes and dislikes.
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The clothing
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 of a particular nation,
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, cannot be comfortable for everyone.
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, cultural differences should be acceptable to the
host
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country
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 to promote
tourism
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. In my opinion,
tourists
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visit
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 a certain
country
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 to enjoy and discover new
cultures
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,
norms
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 and places. They should be allowed to behave as they find it comfortable.
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Host
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The host
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country
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countries
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 can promote
its
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their
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culture
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 through local art, food and places but should not force
tourists
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 to follow their
culture
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. It is often observed that
tourists
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 find native art and food very fascinating and
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, spend their money to purchase and take it back to their
countries
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.
This
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 helps to promote local
norms
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 and
culture
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.
Additionally
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, if any
behavior
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behaviour
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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 is unacceptable or offending to locals,
then
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 they should communicate it to
tourists
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 and should be told about the acceptable conduct. In conclusion, following
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host
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the host
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country
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’s
culture
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 would make
tourists
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 feel more welcome and comfortable during their
visit
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,
however
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, forcing them to comply with
such
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norms
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 may devoid the
host
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 nation from learning about new
cultures
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.
Therefore
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, a mix of foreign and local
culture
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 and
norms
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 should be acceptable by the
host
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 nations to promote and grow the
tourism
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 industry.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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