some people think there are things individuals can do to help prevent global climate change other believe that action by individuals is useless and irrelevant and that is only governments and large business which can make a difference discuss both view and give your own opinion.

The presented graph illustrates that in the given period, how many
girls
and
boys
went for sport in any town of England. Overall, English
boys
had the biggest tendency for football whereas,
girls
inclined
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were inclined
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to swimming. As opposed to
this
, both
gender
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genders
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engage
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engages
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in hockey at least. With regard to the number of youngsters going for
a tennis
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tennis
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, cycling, football, hockey,
boys
surpassed
girls
who accounted for relatively 50, almost 37, 60, 16. The number of
girls
playing football was three times lower than
boys
, which figure was a little more than 20.
Besides
, tennis players among
girls
were roughly 37, hockey players were 9, which 7 persons fewer than
boys
and twenty
girls
were cyclists. T
On the other hand
, it was evident that the number of
girls
from an English town
exceled
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excelled
boys
at badminton and swimming. In both of these categories,
girls
were 10 persons more than
boys
.
Thus
, while fifty of the
girls
were swimmers, 40 were badminton players, the figures relating to the other gender were respectively 40 and 30.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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