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Some people say that friends are more important than family in today's world, others say that family is always more important. writ in support of this views.

There are some
people
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 who believe that family
members
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 are very important in our
life
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, while others think that
friends
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 play a more significant role. I believe that family is more important than
friends
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. There are so many
people
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 in our lives and we have different relationships with different
people
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. Some
people
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 are closely related while some are not so intimate. We can change our relationship with other
people
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.
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, our relationship with our family cannot be changed. Principally, because we have our parents' genes and we have blood ties with our brothers and sisters. Family
members
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 are the biggest sources of motivation and inspiration in our
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. When we are failing, suffering, depressed, or lost, our elder family
members
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 like parents always encouraged us."Don't give up!" "Try, and try again!" Form when we are babies learning how to walk, they give us their patience
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 and their consideration. They give us embraces and the power to move on. In ,addition the elderly family
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 have more
life
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 experience so, they can guide us in a better way.
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, family
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 help each other in any difficult situation. They are always ready to help with and social or personal problems,
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, they do not leave any member of the family in complicated situations. Only family
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 can carry out the financial needs of a person unconditionally.
Friends
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 play a significant role, and being with
friends
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 changes our mood and brings happiness into our lives,but they cannot take the place of family
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. Family
members
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 are always selfless. We cannot imagine a good
life
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 without family
members
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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