Topic: Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is reducing the amount of maximum speed of vehicles. Others think that other ways exist. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Security issues have become the major concern of the modern era. A few individuals claim that slow down the speed of automobiles
such
as van and bikes are a terrific method to decrease
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the number of roadway accidents, but the opponents have conflicting views. That essay will
first
discuss both views,
then
discuss my perspective about it in the subsequent paragraphs. The proponents of the
first
view said that people it is good to decrease the speed of vehicles in order to improve the security on the
road
. In that way,
rider
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the rider
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can easily stop their
cars
or bikes before crashing
to
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any other two or
four
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four-wheeler
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wheeler
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. As the result, neither will occur any mishappening
on
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road
nor any threat to life during riding on the vehicles. To cite an example,
Last
year, I was going to my town on my bike and at that time, there was fog in the surroundings, but I was riding my bike
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above the speed of
fourty
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forty
our
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kilometre
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meter
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per one hour.
Suddeny
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Suddenly
, a child came into my way, but I was
successfuly
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successfully
successful
stoped my bike since of low speed. The opponents of the
first
view claimed that there are other methods too to upgrade
road
safety are ethier citizens should follow the traffic rules or Government should imply the
odd-even
rules for
four wheelers
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four-wheelers
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. In
this
law, one day only the
cars
who have
odd
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number in the
last
should
allowed
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on the
road
as well as the
next
day for even number car.
Consequently
, it will lead to
less
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chances of happening any risk of life or probably reduces the possibilities of car
carshings
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crashing
with each other.
For instance
, in the year
of
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2019, the chief minister of
delhi
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,
Mr.
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Arwind
kezriwal
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Kejriwal
was implement
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the
odd-even
law for
cars
. After that, the
numbers
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of
cars
accidents were reduced by 25% according to the data of
police
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the police
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department. In conclusion, it is believed that
although
road
safety will improve by the
declining
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in the speed of
motobikes
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motorbikes
and
cars
,
but
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odd-even
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the odd-even
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rule is
more
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a more
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effective method than it.
Therefore
, it is better to establish the
odd-even
rule for improving
the
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road
safety rather than slowing the vehicles speed.
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