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a person1s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned

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Introduction
It is being argued that principles that were relevant in the past,
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 as honour, kindness and trust are not so important at present (these days) and were surpassed (overtaken) by social status and properties when judging a person’s worth. I do agree with
this
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 opinion that old-fashioned
values
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 became irrelevant.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, our society is more and more addicted to social media.
People
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 are using these tools, that were launched in the
last
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 decade, to create an image of themselves which is strongly based on showing their lifestyle and material possessions. By displaying a luxurious way of life on the Internet,
people
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 become, what is called, influencers, generating an exponential growth in popularity
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 totally disconnected from character
values
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.
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, some actors are still worshipped by society even though they behave badly .
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 new technology deeply changed how
people
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 interact with each other.
Body paragraph 2
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, relationships
in general
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 are becoming increasingly more superficial.
People
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 nowadays spend more time on the Internet than with other
people
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. As a consequence of the lack of interactions, character
values
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 are not being considered as we fail to truly know the individuals that we communicate with. In the past, children used to play in the street with their friends, adults had more time to get to know their
neighbors
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 and all of them had the opportunity to identify those
values
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 and know a person by them.
Conclusion
To conclude, in my opinion, as
people
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 rely on social media, relationships are more superficial, so a person’s worth nowadays is judged according to his/her social status and possessions other than his/her characters
values
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.

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