Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement? What other measures do you think might be effective?

At the present time,
people
mobility have grown rapidly causing
traffic
jam and
air
pollution. Since that, the optimum
way
to solve these problems is to raise the
petrol
fee.
This
essay will discuss my opinion regarding increase the
price
of gasoline and another
way
that might be useful to solve these problems. I do agree that many countries have taken steps to increase the
price
of
petrol
to solve these problems,
moreover
, some nations have discarded the cheapest option of
petrol
. In Indonesia,
for instance
, the government have removed premium type gasoline which is the lowest
price
petrol
. On the order hand, the government
also
develop their public
transportation
to encourage
people
move
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to use public
transportation
instead
of using a private vehicle. It is clear that increasing the
petrol
fee and developing
the
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public
transportation
will reduce
traffic
jam
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and
air
contamination.
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, raising vehicle tax will
also
suppress the growth rate of the number of vehicles.
Therefore
,
people
with medium economic conditions prefer to use public
transportation
.
For example
, in
Singapore
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the executive
apply
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high tax to the
citizen
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which
have
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a
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private
transportation
. As the result, Singapore
have
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low
traffic
congestion and have good quality
air
. To conclude, the best
way
to suppress the
grow
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of
traffic
is
increasing
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to increase

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the
price
of
the
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petrol
but
in
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the other hand, the government needs to improve their public
transportation
to support their policy. In my opinion, the other
way
to control the growing
traffic
and
air
pollution
is
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are

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raising the private vehicle tax
therefore
,
people
tend to use public
transportation
.
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