IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Some people think climate change has a negative impact on business, while other think that it provides more business option. discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #climate #change #impact #business #option
Irrefutably, it is a debatable argument that some individuals opine that, a bed affect in
business
 by
climate
 difference, howbeit other groups of
people
 deemed that it gives a wide range of opportunity in
business
.
this
 essay intends to analyse both perspectives, I,
however
, side with the former view. To commence with, there are two main reasons why some believe the former view,
firstly
, due to
climate
change
 negative
impact
 on the natural sources
such
 as animals, petroleum and land,
for instance
, according to a survey, there was a significant decline seen in fishing
business
 over the years by 35% , especially after 20th century. many sectors depend on the weather. owing to
climate
change
 there is the possibility of natural disasters, which
impact
 on human mindset in form of fear, as a consequence,
people
 are restricted to do investing in businesses, from
this
 it is clear that there are viable reasons to accept
this
 side.
On the other hand
, those who believe in the latter view, give the following reasons, the main reason is due to limited natural source research tends to do innovation for another way, which opens various employment options,
for instance
, over the years, a decrement was seen in natural energy sources
such
 as wind, solar rays and minerals, to full fill the need of
people
 scientist move to innovation sector and the invention of hydrogen gas happens, which provides
business
such
 as electricity generation plant. altogether, the elucidation above shows why it gives a range of options is discernible. I believe, invest in startups in the form of money, time and manforce are costly
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 so that it resists the
newly
Replace the word
new
show examples
business
 investment, and
as a result
, it gives a negative
impact
 on various sectors. overall, it is hard to survive
business
 while a
change
 in the
climate
. In conclusion,
although
, atmosphere
change
 gives a
plathora
Correct your spelling
plethora
 of
business
, its
impact
 outweighs their advantages, in term of limited opportunity of
people
.
Submitted by rajnpatelb06 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: