IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

In recent years more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages of ebooks outweigh their disadvantages?

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Write on this topic →
Introduction
Since times immemorial, man has always invented and discovered innumerable things. The
Body paragraph 1
advent
Add an article
the advent
show examples
 of
computers
Use synonyms
 made lives easier and the Internet made the smallest information in
Body paragraph 2
the world accessible.
This
Linking Words
 led to the creation of
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 that are the soft copy versions of
Body paragraph 3
the hardcopy
books
Use synonyms
.In recent years, many people have shown more inclination towards
Body paragraph 4
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 rather than
towards
Change preposition
apply
show examples
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
. Undoubtedly, the
merits
Use synonyms
 of
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 outweigh
Body paragraph 5
their
demerits
Use synonyms
. Let us discuss these in detail in subsequent paragraphs.
Body paragraph 6
To begin
Linking Words
 with, let us shed some light on the
merits
Use synonyms
 of
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
.e-
First
Linking Words
 and foremost,
books
Use synonyms
Body paragraph 7
save the environment, as opposed to
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 that lead to
environment
Replace the word
environmental
show examples
 degradation. To
Body paragraph 8
elaborate,
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 are soft copy versions that can be accessed via
computers
Use synonyms
 ,whereas
Body paragraph 9
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 are made by cutting trees. As millions of
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 are created every year, it
Body paragraph 10
results in the cutting down of thousands of trees, and the consequence of
such
Linking Words
 an action is
Body paragraph 11
environmental degradation and climate imbalance. Since many
books
Use synonyms
 are discarded after
Body paragraph 12
usage, it
also
Linking Words
 creates a lot of
paper
Use synonyms
 waste, and the
cost
Use synonyms
 of
disposing
Add the preposition
ofdisposing
show examples
such
Linking Words
 waste is quite high.
Body paragraph 13
In addition
Linking Words
, because
ebooks
Use synonyms
 can be easily saved in
computers
Use synonyms
 and mobiles, it saves a lot of
Body paragraph 14
space. To clarify,
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 do not require any extra space in
Add an article
a bag
show examples
bag
Fix the agreement mistake
bags
show examples
 or any extra shelf in libraries.
Body paragraph 15
Because there is no additional weight other than the device e-book is saved in, a person can
Body paragraph 16
carry hundreds of
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 with itself and can read them sitting anywhere without any
Body paragraph 17
constraints. To illustrate, an article published in The Washington Post in May 2012, by its
Body paragraph 18
editor Benjamin Bradlee on "Popularity of
ebooks
Use synonyms
" stated that the majority of people were
Body paragraph 19
preferring to read
ebooks
Use synonyms
 as they found them to be
space saving
Add a hyphen
space-saving
show examples
 and easy to carry.
Body paragraph 20
Moreover
Linking Words
, the greatest advantage of
ebooks
Use synonyms
 is their
Use synonyms
cost effective
Add a hyphen
cost-effective
show examples
 nature. They are
Body paragraph 21
economical not only for the readers but
also
Linking Words
 for the authors and publishers. To elucidate,
Body paragraph 22
since
students
Use synonyms
 can easily download
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 of their subjects for free, they do not need to
Body paragraph 23
pay a lot of money on the
books
Use synonyms
, and they can share these with others without any
Body paragraph 24
additional
cost
Use synonyms
.
Linking Words
Similarly
Add a comma
,Similarly
show examples
 when an author publishes a book, it can avoid the printing
cost
Use synonyms
 of
Body paragraph 25
millions of copies and can create
one
Use synonyms
 version of the book online, which can be shared with
Body paragraph 26
readers at
much
Add an article
a much
show examples
 lesser
cost
Use synonyms
. To exemplify, a survey conducted by the National Sample
Body paragraph 27
Survey Office on 1000
students
Use synonyms
 , in April 2018, revealed that these
students
Use synonyms
 saved more than
Body paragraph 28
60% of their costs of
books
Use synonyms
 by switching from
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 to
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
.
Body paragraph 29
On the contrary
Linking Words
, there are certain
demerits
Use synonyms
 of
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 as well. Primarily, many times
Body paragraph 30
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 are available in the form of pdfs, and as these pdfs are just scanned copies of
Body paragraph 31
hardcopies, it is very difficult to make notes on these online
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 and to keep a track of
Body paragraph 32
the pages. To explicate, many scanned versions of
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 are available in very poor
Body paragraph 33
quality. As the data is scanned and not in the text format, it is not possible to search for any
Body paragraph 34
particular word
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
and it results in reading through multiple pages to look for particular
Body paragraph 35
information. In order to make notes on the sheet,
one
Use synonyms
 needs to have good knowledge of the
Body paragraph 36
tools and programs
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 and it can really become a tough task for someone who is not very well
Body paragraph 37
acquainted with the
computers
Use synonyms
 or mobiles. To continue, prolong use of
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 can
also
Linking Words
Body paragraph 38
pose various
health
Use synonyms
 issues. To explain, text on
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 is very small and
one
Use synonyms
 needs to focus
Body paragraph 39
continuously on the screen for long hours. Sitting for
longer
Replace the word
long
show examples
 stretches of hours can impact
Body paragraph 40
the eyesight, cause headaches and backache. Since
students
Use synonyms
 study most of the time from
Body paragraph 41
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
, it can impact their physical
health
Use synonyms
 very badly and can
also
Linking Words
 cause long term
Body paragraph 42
problems. To illustrate, a research conducted by the University of British Columbia,
Body paragraph 43
Vancouver, Canada in December2019 on 500 of its engineering
students
Use synonyms
 revealed that the
Body paragraph 44
Use synonyms
health
Add an article
the health
show examples
 of 70% of the
students
Use synonyms
 deteriorated within
Use synonyms
one year
Add a hyphen
one-year
show examples
 time frame after continuous use
Body paragraph 45
of
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
.
Body paragraph 46
To encapsulate, it can be concluded that the
merits
Use synonyms
 of
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 outweigh the
demerits
Use synonyms
.
Body paragraph 47
While using
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 can be economical and environment friendly
on
Add the comma(s)
,on
show examples
one
Use synonyms
 hand, it can
also
Linking Words
Body paragraph 48
have a negative impact on
health
Use synonyms
on the other hand
Linking Words
. The negative effects
however
Linking Words
 can be
Body paragraph 49
easily controlled by taking measures
such
Linking Words
 as doing regular exercise. As the
merits
Use synonyms
 outweigh
Body paragraph 50
the
demerits
Use synonyms
 of using
ebooks
Use synonyms
, it is no doubt that people are choosing to read
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 rather
Conclusion
than
Replace the word
then
show examples
 the
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: