Crime rates will fall as advances in technology make it easier to detect and prevent crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree

The Government believe that with the development of Technology,
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cases can be controlled easier than before.
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this
idea.I strongly agree with
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idea. In recent years, biometrics get updated which can recognize all human beings faces all over the world.
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rubber or a murder detectives can solve the case sooner than expected.
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of new secret cameras like CCTV and installing them all over the street make it possible to follow and record every
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online and save them as a document for solving
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research South Korea, is the
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every public place, they have CCTVs which can detect all
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therefore
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country is all controlled and prevent easily. In Conclusion,
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improvement
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of Technology
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decreasing murder and other
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cases all over the world. I totally agree with
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime deterrent
  • high-tech surveillance
  • facial recognition systems
  • omnipresence
  • deter
  • digital forensics
  • ballistic testing
  • revolutionize
  • exonerate
  • root causes
  • social inequality
  • invasion of privacy
  • civil liberties
  • surveillance
  • data collection
  • negative implications
  • cybercrime
  • hacking
  • identity theft
  • online fraud
  • cybersecurity
  • vulnerabilities
  • exploit
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