Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to but the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive and negative development.

Nowadays, more
people
are doing immigration to other countries for job purposes.
However
, cultural and language shocks make them feel weird
also
, they will feel homely by finding their favourite things in the shops. So, I strongly agree that it is a positive development.
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To begin
with, food difference is the major problem almost all immigrants will face
in
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the beginning of their life in the
host
country. In the
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mean time
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, if the human gets a chance to buy the products of his wish to cook or eat, he can satisfy his hunger
in
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all means.
Moreover
, the above-mentioned point is applicable for clothing
also
. Some
people
will be very particular with traditional kinds of wearing so, they will definitely
struggles
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to adapt with the western outfits if
the
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move to European countries. To summarize, by considering all these aspects it will be good if the
host
country
offer
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the demanded things for the immigrants. To continue with, the humans can be more productive if the
host
country
make
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them
to
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feel that as
there
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birth place
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. Truly,
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an individual
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individual
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can able to perform in a peak manner only if they are happy with
food
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as well as comfort. In the meantime, humans cannot stop migration
also
. In short,
availability
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of the particular nation's products
make
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people
really delighted.
Finally
, all over the world
people
do migration and they will be blissful if they get the products of their choice in the
host
countries. So in
this
way
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I believe that
this
is a positive movement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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