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Some people prefer to spend time with their own age group while others like to spend their time with different age groups. Discuss both approaches and give your own opinion.

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A highly controversial issue today relates to whether individuals are spending their time with
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 with distinct
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 or not. In
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 question from both points of view and
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 explain why I believe that most individuals hang out with colleagues of the same
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. There are
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 who argue that the benefits of being surrounded by
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 of the same
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 considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
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 is that they tend to share many
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 hobbies and interests. It is
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 a long time without feeling
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embarrassed
 due to the lack of ideas. To illustrate, a talk between a juvenile and an elderly person who do not share the same interests and routine.
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, others believe that there are more advantages of spending time with those who have distinct
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. It is often argued that
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 is the best option to acquire
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 often have
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 to share due to their experiences. A
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stimulate
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 those around them with their happiness and enthusiasm.
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 difficulties with their good sense of humour. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
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, I feel that
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 the big chance of learning and listening to
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 stories from individuals of
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distinct
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 sounds interesting, I would prefer to keep surrounded by colleagues with my own
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 is because the chances of having the same interests are stronger.
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