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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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,
Canada
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Canada
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number
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internet
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Mexico
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number
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Canada
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 similar
number
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internet
 users 12% and 6% respectively in 1999. While the
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about 50% overtook
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 in 2003,
Mexico
internet
 surfers grow up steadily to reach almost 27% in 2003.
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 followed a similar trend, increasing gradually to finish the period at around 88% (
Canada
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Mexico
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 it had a more erratic pattern in the rate of
internet
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number
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internet
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 to around 45%. After that, the figure rose slowly to finish the period at almost 72%.
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