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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is a common belief that the disadvantages of the self-driving
systems
 that will be developed in the future by
automobile
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 industry outweigh their advantages.
However
, there is a more persuasive argument that these
systems
 will be beneficial because they may protect people from the dangers of their own actions. On the one hand,
technology
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the technology
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 used in self-driving cars can
be violates
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 the car owner’s privacy. Since
the
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autonomous
systems
 actually collect and save a vast amount of data. They know that when and where their owners have
traveled
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, how often they travel, and where they are at every single moment. The problem is
this
 information is not safe. Many IT professionals reported in
the
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 recent study that computerized driving
systems
 are vulnerable to hackers as they can easily access those data saved in
storage
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device
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 in the car.
Therefore
,
such
system
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 could make the drivers victims of crime when
this
 system become widely used.
Nevertheless
, self-driving automobile
systems
 will make us
more safe
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 than before. These
systems
 are based on finely tuned algorithms designed to overcome human’s error. As a matter of fact, research has shown that about 70
percent
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 of automobile accidents can be prevented by autonomous
systems
.
This
 is because they continuously monitor road conditions and check driving speed, keeping a distance from the cars in front of them.
This
 capacity can lead to an overall reduction in the accident rate. Namely, these
systems
 will make everyone on the road much safer than before. To cut a long story short, while there are some disadvantages to self-driving automobiles, it is evident that there are more advantages to use these
systems
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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