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Nowadays some people have anti-social behavior and lack respect to others. What are the reasons? What are solutions?

#people #behavior #lack #respect
These days some groups of people behave like they prefer to be alone and cannot tolerate others.
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 anti-social deeds make
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 trend of behaviour. In
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 it has numerous reasons which revolve around societies and families, and it absolutely like other obstacles
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. To explain around reasons which make
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 and foremost, anti-social men and women totally are individuals who have not had self-esteem. which is why
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 not a person to have self-respect, he would never treat others respectfully.
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 cell phones and humans, the more material of proper social behaviour will lessen in communities.Since there is
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exotic
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 better user-friendly games and entertainments on mobile. Softwares
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 popularize addiction to playing or a sort of unbreakable relation which mere has two sides؛ human beings and devices.
On the other hand
, there are adequate ways to solve the problem of lack of attention to peers. The
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.
Therefore
 the eminent solution to boost self-esteem among infants could be striving to raise the awareness of suit upbringing. Parents should be taught by progogical
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programmes
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 paramount importance of flourishing fruitful approaches of teaching in primary schools. It would be inevitable that to have a
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mental
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 fostering and developing their festivals and ceremonies which are embodied vase age group of people to assist them to
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develop
 the social skills
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 as chatting with each other. in conclusion,
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chronic disease by
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 majority of mobile phones and lack of suitable upbringing methods in family, governments can disappear these issues by boosting family awareness and gathering in public.
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