Multicultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic peoples, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are tremendously controversial notions heating a debate over the pros and cons of cultural diversity. While some

people

side fact that it is immensely beneficial to

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society, others do not. In my very school of thought,

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everything has its both sides and

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is not an exception, I relatively consider myself an advocate of the latter. Without a shadow of

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, to some

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belief,

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phenomenon can eventuate some redeeming features since it acts as a precursor for the improvement of the individual. By wisely exchanging their traditional institutions with those from other ethnic groups of

people

with ease, they would not only have a better sense of other cultures but

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widen their horizon since they have a chance to make use of multidimensional perspectives and provoke their critical thinking.

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leads to more rounded

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for the nation. While the remarkable merit of it is widely acknowledged, its drawbacks, inevitably, still linger. It is an obstacle for

people

to reside harmoniously with those who possess distinct ethos when the distinction between

people

’s perceptions can result in miserable misunderstanding or even worse, wars, including both verbal and physical. The USA can be cited as a quintessential example

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situation when

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nation is home for every race in the world regardless of their skin tone, their

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or their political ideology. Racist, human

discriminations

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, corporal

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and other wicked acts are considered serious burdens for not only the individual but

also

the government to eradicate it. In conclusion, despite the desirable impact brought by the combination of

people

from fundamental different ethnic groups, I particularly insist that it still does more harm than good for a community.