Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while ​    others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too.​     Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is considered by some
people
that all
company
decisions
should be taken by
one
person, whereas others hold the view that workers should take a part in the process of making
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decision
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. While only
one
person’s opinion and view can make conflicts in
company
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, I strongly believe that employees’ thoughts should be considered as well. On the
one
hand, making conclusions including employees’
role
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takes a lot of time which can destroy the productivity of the
company
.
Managers
are the
people
who can do it by themselves as it is part of their responsibility. They can solve any problems as fast as possible.
For example
, there are many types of
managers
in
one
company
such
as PR manager, media manager and others.
Thus
, these
people
can make preferences including all prospects of
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corporation.
In addition
,
managers
always include other
people
’s ideas and thoughts.
On the other hand
, making an agreement
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alone is found difficult for many. Employees’ ideas and
decisions
can make it possible despite the hardships.
For example
, online surveying platforms are used to consider many
people
’s opinions by making graphical analyses.
In addition
, it may help to
company
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to develop other categories and characteristics by including workers’
decisions
. Because all
people
are different by themselves, and they may have more creative and effective ideas than their
managers
. All things considered,
managers
can make agreements without wasting time and
efforts
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,
although
the time
taken
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by including workers in
decision – making
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operation
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, resultant and effective
decisions
are better than quick conclusions.
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