Multi-cultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic peoples, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a controversial phenomenon heating a debate over the fact that a great many people from various ethnic groups are dwelling together in a multicultural nation. Everything has its own merits and demerits,

however

, I strongly believe that the redeeming features still outweigh its counterpart. Evidently, a variety of ethnic peoples might tremendously enrich

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social life, broaden people’s

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as well as do wonders for a nation’s prosperity. People from different regions hold a unique tradition with them,

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, they might bring a remarkable contribution to the diversity of cultures.

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,

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Americans

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not only celebrate New Year’s Eve, which is their long-standing custom but they can

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experience the Lunar New Year in Asia by visiting China Town.

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might not only bring

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novel experiences to visitors so they can have a deeper understanding

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Asian’s life, but it

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hugely attracts tourists.

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, the country can gain great fruitfulness in terms of economy and tourism. While the merits of

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-cultural societies are widely acknowledged, there are several latent demerits that should not be neglected. The mixture between different ethnic groups can lead to obstacles for policy-makers regarding

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well-control the whole area, and the difference between living habits and social prejudice are main drivers of undesirable conflicts and discrimination which can pose a threat to the safety of the nation. Riots towards refugees' shelters can be cited as a dire problem that the

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should formulate a possible solution

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In conclusion, multiculturalism is a positive global phenomenon

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brings people from different parts of the world closer.

However

, there are some grave issues that need to be tackled.