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Some people say Histroy is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of people consumption and purchasing habits of coffee and tea in five different Australian cities. Overall, the majority of the population were preferred to go to a café and have a drink, while expecting in
Adelaide
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, the less amount of residence preferred to buy fresh powder.
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 with, the highest amount was recorded in Melbourne and Hobart, while it was approximately 64%, both remained unchanged. The
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 place goes to Sydney, it was accounted for 62%. The fewer amount people have been reported by the city of
Adelaide
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.
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, the majority of the
Adelaide
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 community consumes instant powder rather than the other two options. It was almost 50%. Hobart and, Brisbane reported the same percentage, it was about 52%.
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, In Sydney half of the population were bought fresh coffee and consider to the other four cities it was less popular. Brisbane and,
Adelaide
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 the proportion was unchanged and reported for around 34%. To sum up, according to the survey details.
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, more than half of the residence in the four cities were preferred to go to a café, while except in
Adelaide
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 people.
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