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The number of plants and animals is declining. Describe some reasons for this problem and suggest some solution.

#plants #animals
There is a fact that over long years, the amount of
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fauna and flora in many countries around the world is diminishing day by day at a worrying rate.
This
 essay will highlight some causes and specific solutions to mitigate
this
 solution. One of the main reasons for
this
 phenomenon is deforestation. As we know, the forest is considered
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the home of animals and plants. So, deforestation means it destructs the habitat of many animals and the depletion of their food supply. With the development of human civilizations, they cut down trees for building industry, and more and more creatures are at risk of extinction. To solve
this
 issue, the government should promote reforestation. Forest rangers need to tighten forest protection and severely punish those who illegally cut down forests. Another major contributing factor is
climate
change
.
This
 is the consequence of global warming. Because of the increase in carbon emissions, the fauna and flora are unable to adapt to their new environmental condition in a short time.
For example
,
climate
change
 has an impact on turtle nesting sites, it alters sand temperatures, so
then
 many hatchlings are dead. To tackle
this
 problem, the government can reduce the contribution of greenhouse gases to the atmosphere.
For instance
, we decrease the use of gas, motorbike or car…
instead
 by taking public transport or
electricity
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 vehicles.
As a result
, the effects of
man
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 driven
climate
change
 on the ecosystem would be declined. In conclusion, two of the main causes of
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 in animal and plant species are deforestation and
climate
change
.
However
, these can be managed through promoting reforestation,
also
 setting regulations and limiting greenhouse gases.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • ecosystem
  • endangered species
  • conservation
  • sustainability
  • preservation
  • reforestation
  • ecological balance
  • habitat destruction
  • poaching
  • renewable resources
  • wildlife sanctuaries
  • environmental degradation
  • climate resilience
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