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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.

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Nowadays,the
job
 market has become very volatile. There are some
people
 who hop jobs in 2-3 years,
while
 some who
work
 at the same place for their whole life. Both the options have its fair share of nuances and complexities. The
people
 who
work
 at the
at
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same
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 place throughout their lives have a familiarity with the
work
 environment,colleagues and customers.
Hence
,they become used to the
work
 given to them and perfect it over a period of time.
Due to
 that, they have a detailed understanding of the product, and how to go about their
job
.
Also
, they enjoy
high
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 degree of trust with the senior leadership of the company.
Although
this
 has certain advantages,it has its fair share of downsides too.
This
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people
 never get to explore different
work
 cultures and become monotonous over time. They are usually not ready for any disruption in the company and get very specific about roles. They lack knowledge about
work
 domains as they have never ventured out of their comfort zone.
Therefore
,
on the other
hand
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 we have the
job
 hoppers.
This
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 are the
people
 who prefer to
work
 at various organizations throughout their life and try it all. Whatever be there reason for shifting jobs, be it money,
work
 culture or better
opportunity
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,they always want to explore and perform to their best abilities.
Due to
this
 they
the
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 experience of working at multiple complex challenges in a single life. They solve different problems at different places and continue to upgrade themselves for the next task.So
this
 attitude rarely makes them settle down
at
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 one place or role.But
this
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these
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people
 never make friends or bonds in the industries they
work
.
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 They never have the values of trust or dedication towards one particular role. They sometimes think
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of the goal of
industry
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 they
work
at
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. I think there is no perfect way of working. What suits you best should be the approach of the employees.At the start of
career
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a career
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, sometimes it is necessary to change
job
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jobs
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 in order to understand true liking provided that they will
finally
 settle
at the end
.
Because
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this
continous
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continuous
job
changing
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 can have a detrimental impact on
mental
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 health and calm of the person. In conclusion,
people
 should look to be
a
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long term
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employee
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employees
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 but not before truly loving what they do for a living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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