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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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A few
people
 would rather stick to one routine while others believe constant
change
 is preferable. In
this
 essay, I am of the opinion that
change
 is beneficial to humans as they go on with their daily activities. It is obvious, that doing the same routine frequently can limit the opportunities of learning new things.
This
 can make
people
 stay familiar with the old practices of the past, lagging behind on the developments happening around them. It is,
therefore
, disagreed that
this
 pattern of lifestyle should be embraced. A prime example is
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use of piggy banks where
people
 save money and refuse to keep their savings in a Central bank due to the fear of commissions taken by the banking system.
However
, others disagree and feel that
change
 helps discover new talents. New Gift’s can only be found in a person when they are ready to take risks, going out there in the world to attempt different skills. Despite the risks involved, life is all about falling down, getting back up and pushing forward till the goal is achieved. For
this
 reason,
this
 essay agrees that
change
 should be perceived as a good thing.
For instance
, a medical student who is only familiar with how the human body works bagged a masters degree in business administration. While the benefits of
change
, particularly new gifts, allows
people
 to be versatile in their occupation, some others still feel that
people
 should live life in one pattern.
However
, I am of the opinion that being open and wanting to learn has clearly positive effects than drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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