Internet technology means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, many proclaim that the internet is being become part of everyone life, so
people
can easily acquire knowledge about the foreign nation. I completely disagree with
this
notion
because
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the lack of reliable information and experience about
tourist
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a tourist
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destination
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destinations
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. To being with , visitors can only access
a
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poplular
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popular
places
through the
teach
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.
This
is because many users
upolads
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uploads
upload
always good things on the website.
Therefore
,
people
will not experience
reality
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the reality
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of the destination. As per the research, 45% of the data
always
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is always
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unauthentic on the internet.
Furthermore
,
people
can not encounter
foreigen
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foreign
people
and
culture
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cultures
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.
Hence
, they may be lost an opportunity to meet native
pepole
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people
face to face.
Moreover
, travellers can really enjoy
to visit
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the
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apply
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popluare
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popular
places
. As they can
easliy
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easily
touch reality and get aware
about
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all the
poplular
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popular
places
.
This
will lead to
shareing
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sharing
share
with their peers as well as relatives about the trip. Another most important is that any person can spend time with their family's members and
also
friends . Because
,
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they can visit
togheter
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together
rather than
wathcing
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watching
online platform.
As a result
, they will release
thier
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their
the
stress and enjoy the moment. To
conclued
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conclude
concluded
, I think getting
informations
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via the internet is the easiest way to know about the place.
However
,
people
may receive
aduquate
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adequate
data about the common
places
and they can not enjoy as compared to
direct
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visit the
places
.
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