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Nowdays children have too much freedom. Some people think it may be dangerous in some aspects. Do you agree or disagree?

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With changing world and
parents
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 becoming busy with their
lives
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,
children
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 have too much
freedom
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.
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 has led to some negative impacts on toddler's
lives
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. Some people think it may be dangerous due to several reasons. I strongly agree with
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 opinion. With increased
freedom
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,
children
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 have access to some negative forces in their surroundings which include drug usage and alcohol consumption. With
parents
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 being busy with their
lives
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 and having very little time to take care of their
children
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, young people are under subject to different kinds of exploitation.
Parents
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 often leave
children
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 with babysitters or other people who are least bothered with the well being of
children
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.
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 results in kids having no suitable guidance system at a young age.
Children
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 tend to develop various habits which cause them to harm in several ways.
Parents
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 need to dedicate a certain amount of time in their busy
lives
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 to take interest in what is going on in their
children
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's
lives
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. It is their responsibility to make sure their
children
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 are not subjected to any kind of negative influences around them.
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,
parents
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 can decide to have at least one meal together every day to discuss what problems their toddlers are facing and discuss how they can overcome any problems they are facing. To conclude,
children
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 should not be given much
freedom
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 as there are a lot of negative impacts to
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. At tender
age
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children
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 will not be knowing what is good or bad for them and often tend to get trapped in negative influences. So it is
parents
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' responsibility to make sure
children
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 are not given much
freedom
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, even though given
freedom
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, they should monitor their well being at regular intervals/
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