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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #lives #change
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.some people believe that
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differences are not required in
life
 and have to live the same way in the past while others argued that,
changes
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 in every
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life
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I'm
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 going to analysis on both views before reaching to opinion . On one hand,there are numerous reasons why
changes
 are not necessary.
Firstly
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everyday
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become
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 like a habit .
Therefore
,people do not
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 make
changes
 in their
life
 and they have
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adapt
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 a proper
time table
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 in
life
 if any
changes
 occur
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 would affect their entire
life
. For evidence, parents should have
arrange
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 their
life
 in
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 manner
according
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 their child preferences
changes
 can make it worst.
secondly
 ,it is very difficult to accept the
changes
 in
life
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 circumstances is quite difficult.
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other
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 hand,replacement require in human lives.people should learn new things everyday day which help them to enhance their knowledge.due to various reasons
changes
 are pivotal.routine
life
make
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life
 more bore individual likes to experience new things in
life
 .To
opitome
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epitome
option
,a human has going various stages in
life
 so every stage of
life
 something newly happen in
life
moreover
 person has to accept that.compared with childhood, adulthood entirely different. To conclude,
changes
 are required in everyone's
life
 but it's the person own responsibility to make the
changes
 in a positive manner.
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  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
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