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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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In the present, environmental and economical challenges in the globe not only will affect the national level but
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 the individual level.
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, there is a trend of people working themselves
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 of working for an employer due to the lack of personal space and work-related stress, yet there are many drawbacks.
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 with, most of the people living in
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 era missing their personal life due to the heavy workload, yet they are paid less at the end of the month,
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, they see a silver lining if they can be seen themselves as an entrepreneur.
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 is due to the global economical fluctuations and when employers are trying to make a profit without considering their employees' wellbeing.
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, employees will develop stress and lose their personal life while creating a state of dissatisfaction at their workplace, and they continuously search for alternative ways of making a sufficient amount of money where they can get a high profit
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 of monthly pay.
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, when a person is engaging in an independent pursuit of economic activity, they must take a higher risk of securing a permanent source of income. As an example, when a person tries to do a textile shop, he must consider the difficulties of a situation that the globe is experiencing
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 as the Covid-19 pandemic.
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 kind of unexpected situation will make businesses
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 as those are in the clothing industry, into a miserable state, yet most of the people will stay inside and will not go outside due to the plague.
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, they must consider facing these kinds of unpredictable stages of business and must save money in case of overcoming
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 situations which will be an impossible task for most. In conclusion, self-employed individuals may earn a lot of money compared to an employee who receives wedges;
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, they are keeping themselves at an insecure stage where the income will not be constant.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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