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Most People today prefer to socialize online rather that spending time with their friends in the local community. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is irrefutable that in the contemporary era, it is a tendency for the public to socialize online even though they have time to meet a domestic crowd and mutual friends.
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people outweigh online time spending with folks. To commence with, There are some pros why Communities who are in a current-generation like to connect online with society,
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, It is not only very convenient and comfortable but
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 the various kind of personalities encounter with each other, they give a plethora of positive things,
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, Some time hard for the international community to meet face to face so for them they prefer online.
Moreover
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, Online is a fast flow of knowing each other due to that crowd are updated with day to day life of their friends. Altogether, These are viable reasons we can not ignore. On the paradoxical side, there are many drawbacks as well, Sometimes individuals can not help via virtual contact so there might be a chance to suffer from some serious incident, as a repercussion community try to restrict themselves to share their feelings with their mutual nurtures. Another, In order to get comfort zone quickly
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 the human psychology to become socialize offline. To exemplify, research states that after the booming of online socialism 20% of international folks opine that it is hard to trust sometimes on their close mate due to lack of trust and bonding, So, these are demerits we can not keep away. In recapitulation, I would like to reiterate that though through Socialize online with their colleague have some merits, the disadvantages are far too many to be ignored.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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