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Stress has become a major problem in modern world. What are some causes of this and what can be the solution to them?

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Stress
 affects both individuals directly and families indirectly. The following are some of the causes
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stress
. Pressure at
work
 can affect an individual
such
 that it clouds the mind and
disorientes
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disorients
disorientates
 him or her.
This
 can be manifested in headaches.
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stress
, loss of employment especially for breadwinners in the family can lead to
stress
. Divorce can
also
 lead to
stress
 especially between the couples and among the family members especially the kids. The aforementioned causes can be remedied either through societal approaches like guiding and counselling for couples and policy shifts at
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work places
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. Provision of
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 environment and access to decent j s would go
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less stressful communities.
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