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The bar graph illustrates the
percentage
 of
people
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weight
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age
groups
. Overall, the
participation
 of each type of
weight
 measurement varied significantly during the period under study. While in 1995 the
largeest
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largest
 proportion of individuals in each
age
group
 had an ideal
weight
 and the
percentage
 of obese was
smallm
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small
 and even inexistent for some brackets, in 2015 the
participation
 of
people
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 an ideal
weight
 increased considerably for all
age
groups
. Only for those between 20-29
years
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 the distribution of
people
 in each eright measurement was similar to the one in 1995. In 1995 the majority proportion of
individual
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 in each
age
group
 had an ideal
weight
, about 50% for those in the two eldest
group
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, and 60% or more for the other 3
groups
. Underweight
people
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also
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important
participation
, from 18% for the 40-49
group
 to just above 40% for the 60-69
group
. Overweight had
a
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modest
participation
 for the
people
 between 30 and 49
years
 old, while the
percentage
 of obese was small. In 2015 the composition within each
age
group
 changed dramatically, except for the 20-29
years
 old
group
. The proportion of underweight individuals drop considerably compare to 1995, whole the
percentage
 of ideal decreased modestly for those between 30 and 59
years
 old; the fall was dramatically for the eldest
group
. At the same
time
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 the
participation
 of overweight rose for all
groups
 but for the 50-59.
Finally
, 2015 showed more
participation
 of obese
people
: most went up for the 30-39 and 40-49
groups
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 the
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years
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