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Muesems and art galleries should concentrate on works that show history and culture of their own country rather than works of the other parts in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Museum
 and art galleries do not concentrate while on work in
country
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 and cultural history. The government are working in another part of the city is wastage of money. In my ,opinion
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 because in my countryside
Museum
 it is damaged all the structure. There
Museum
 inside which very dusty.
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, it has very rare items seen the
Museum
,not only but
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 all the things simple stand on table nether than in the glass nor decorate things.
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 old structure since before years not changing the mates and wash.
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, in my city nor
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 government should
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 facilities,because in the many countries visited tourist Seen old things in
history
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the history
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 of
country
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. If the incredible structure watch in
Museum
 one person thought in other individuals, rather than country reputation is fabulous. Despite the employers are other works waste of money in stupid stuff, whereas main building is broken. In conclusion,art galleries and museums not only teach us but
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 history for the upcoming citizens and
plays
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 a vital role in the old days of our motherland.
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