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In some cities, there are few controls over the design and construction of new homes and office buildings , so people can build in whatever they like.Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#cities #controls #design #construction #homes #office #buildings #people
In
this
 contemporary era,Authority
is have
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 no control over the design and building
new
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 houses. A chunk of
individual
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individuals
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 Opines that The government should limit the choices of
individuals
 regarding the construction of new buildings whilst others are sceptical about it. I,
however
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 believe that the demerits outweigh
merits
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.
To begin
 with, freedom of choice or personal property is
fundamental
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a fundamental
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 right of
individuals
. According to
this
, folks can decide the Architect and construct the houses according to their requirement. Government forcing the rules
over population
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 is
the
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 violation of fundamental rights.
For instance
, homes are the biggest investment of
individuals
 so they have the desire to make it unique and aesthetic,
this
 will provide them with
the
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mental satisfaction.
On the other hand
, freedom of choice in
construction
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 of office buildings has numerous negative effects.
Firstly
, people in order to enhance their status in society,
they
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build a normal house is switch covers mammoth of space.As Consequences of
this
, traffic inside big cities
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 increasing rapidly scarcity of land occurs.
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,the land which can use to provide residence to multiple folks is only occupied by
small
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a small
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 number of people.
Moreover
,many
individuals
 violate
code
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 of conduct while
construction
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of
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these buildings.
Ramification
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The ramification
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 of
this
,economy takes huge losses as government can use
this
 money on the public services. To conclude,having the choice of building houses is
fundamental
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a fundamental
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 right of
individuals
 yet we
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cannot ignore its negative outcomes
such
 as scarcity of land and economic losses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • controls over
  • design and construction
  • freedom of expression
  • creativity in architecture
  • lack of uniformity
  • unsafe structures
  • implementing guidelines
  • aesthetic appeal
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