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In some cities, there are few controls over the design and construction of new homes and office buildings , so people can build in whatever they like.Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
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 contemporary era,Authority has no control over the design and building of new houses. A chunk of
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 Opines that The government should limit the choices of
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 regarding the construction of new buildings whilst others are sceptical about it. I ,
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 believe that the demerits outweigh the merits.
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 with, freedom of choice or personal property is the fundamental right of
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. According to
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, folks can decide the Architect and construct the houses according to their requirement. Government forcing the rules over the population is a violation of fundamental rights.
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, homes are the biggest investment of
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 so they have the desire to make it unique and aesthetic,
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 will provide them with mental satisfaction.
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, freedom of choice in the construction of office buildings has numerous negative effects.
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, people in order to enhance their status in society, build a normal house is switch covers a mammoth of space.As Consequences of
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, traffic inside big cities is increasing rapidly scarcity of land occurs.
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,the land which can use to provide residence to multiple folks is only occupied by a small number of people.
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,many
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 violate the code of conduct while constructing these buildings.A ramification of
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,economy takes huge losses as government can use
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 money on the public services. To conclude,having the choice of building houses is the fundamental right of
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 yet we cannot ignore its negative outcomes
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 as scarcity of land and economic losses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • controls over
  • design and construction
  • freedom of expression
  • creativity in architecture
  • lack of uniformity
  • unsafe structures
  • implementing guidelines
  • aesthetic appeal
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