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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Economically stable
nations
 assist developing
nations
 with financial support, but it does not make any difference in the deep-rooted problems of
poor
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once
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ones
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.
That is
 why other kinds of help should be given to
the
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needy
countries
. In my opinion, rich
countries
 can provide healthcare facilities, advanced education systems to poor
countries
. There are enormous reasons, why people think that providing other types of amenities to developing states is the best way to do help. One is that wealthy
nations
 can transfer goods and food to poorer areas to reduce the high level of poverty and starvation as well as they can establish organizations to provide modern facilities like advanced education, healthcare facilities and so on. Another thing is that developed
nations
 can provide job opportunities
also
 as they can open factories, multinational companies in poor
countries
. If these organizations are built-in weak economies, they will get employment, which will definitely be helpful to develop the economy of undeveloped
countries
.
However
, sometimes it is not beneficial because it may create the risk of corruption and make the citizens lethargic of undeveloped states as well. Since people of poor
countries
 will depend on rich
countries
 in every implication. To conclude, as per my above discussion, I opine that wealthy
nations
 should build educational institutions, MNCs, hospitals in economically developing
countries
 to mitigate the problem of poverty.
Therefore
, they should provide help in
such
 ways
instead
 of financial support.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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