Some people believe that bicycles are the best mode of transport in the cities, while others disagree. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both view and give your opinion.

Bicycle
is a one of the famous
transport
in our
live
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. A lot of people think that
this
type of
transport
will be more comfortable in the enormous city, but some deny it. In my position,
bicycle
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bicycles
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have advantages more than drawbacks ,
it
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they
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can become a solution to traffic jams or any environmental problems. Those who do not like
this
type of
transport
believe that a
bicycle
is an unsafe way to travel. They argue that you can get more health damage from a
bicycle
.
Firstly
, a
bicycle
has very little space for
transport
, and
secondly
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you can really get serious injuries from it.
Moreover
, we can see some situations that two-wheeled mode of
transport
give negatively impact for main transports. In
this
situations
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, both will
be suffer
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. Despite the fact that the bike has only 2 places, it takes up very little space, which will significantly improve the level of traffic jams with the active use of
this
type.
Furthermore
, actively using
of
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this
transport
give some physical load. What will be very effective to improve your health.
Thirdly
,
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the bike
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bike
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bikes
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will be
good
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a good
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solution for our air pollution problems. If humanity
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the
transport
,
level
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the level
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of chemical things in our pollution will be decreased. In brief, I think that bike has minor drawbacks and, if it used correctly, we can have very good consequences.
Therefore
, I believe that two-wheeled vehicles are one of the most comfortable and convenient modes of transportation.
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