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Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics difficult, it ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this option?

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Recently, some of the results of the school learning program survey showing that more than 60% of
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 being loose in understanding knowledge in classes. Noticeably,
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 is one of the
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 that getting the highest vote in the most difficult learning program and being considered to be an optional subject. Personally, I completely disagree with
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views that whether we should change it into an optional subject. For some of the reasons, due to the levels of the learning program which impacts a lot on
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’s development is a hard-solving issue. Especially in the Asia area, the amount of calculation knowledge that Asia
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 need to get is out of their ability.
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, summer is a golden time for some parents to send their kids to full-time extra classes. It is suddenly making an invisible pressure on
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, in daily classes,
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 takes more time than others.
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, fortunately, that it is not necessary to take a huge amount of knowledge like Asia but math is
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 one of the standard tests for them to graduate from primary to high school.
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 invisibly create the bored of
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 in it. Commonly in preadolescent-age
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, having the wrong mindset about
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 has become a trend, and numbers of
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 spend less time with
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. In fact, learning logical
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 is really useful for
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’s development. Some researchers have shown that logical
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 having a large contribution to
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 thinking mindset and intelligent quotient.
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, the opportunities in career and
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 that logical
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 bring to you, especially
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. In my opinion, it is important that parents and
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 finding new solutions for
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 together. There are various scientific learning tips but the most essential is the interaction and
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 between each lesson in
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. Following scientists, the interaction and practice between each lesson will provide for learner reality uses in
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 even in the most abstract
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is important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental
  • compulsory
  • inclusive teaching methods
  • logical reasoning
  • critical thinking
  • interactive learning
  • knowledge gap
  • educational and career opportunities
  • education reform
  • universal language
  • STEM fields
  • innovation
  • economic development
  • managing finances
  • problem-solving
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