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It is much more convenient to watch a movie on television or computer than buy a ticket and go to the cinema. In the nearest future the popularity of cinemas will drastically decline. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
mordern
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modern
 era,
People
 has various options to choose
for
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the
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entartainment
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entertainment
 and amusement. Some opine that there is an increasing trend for watching
films
 over the television or computer rather than visiting the
theaters
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theatres
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.
Although
,
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 in present times popularity soared for watching cinema at home, I disagree that prominence of cinemas will sharply decrease in near future. The proponent of
this
 view suggests that watching
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a movie
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movie
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movies
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 at home is convenient and
stress free
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stress-free
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.
Firstly
,
people
 from
middle class
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background
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 tend to avoid watching
films
 in
cinema
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.
This
 is
beacuse
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because
 nowadays tickets for watching a
movie
 became too expensive and sometimes it is a challenge for these
people
 to afford
it
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them
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.
Furthermore
, due to Covid-19 Pendamic, many
contries
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countries
forced
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 to implement total lockdown and because of
this
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 all
theaters
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theatres
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 were closed.
Hence
, OTT
plaform
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platform
platforms
such
 as Netflix and many others gain much popularity
amoung
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among
people
.
Lastly
, due to heavy traffic problems in metro cities travelling can be challenging. There are various reasons for
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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 to visit
nearest
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the nearest
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 cinema house for watching
films
.
To begin
 with,
Theaters
 has great visual and sound effects. The experience of watching
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a movie
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movie
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movies
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 in
a
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theaters
a theater
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theatres
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theaters
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theatre
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 is
an
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utterly mesmerizing compared to seeing
films
 on
televisions
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television
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.
Secondly
,
People
 are so busy
in
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thier
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their
 work, they need relaxation time with family. Visiting
theaters
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theatres
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 and enjoying
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a movie
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movie
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movies
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 with family can be a perfect outing for
a family members
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family members
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. In
Conlusion
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Conclusion
, Watching
movie
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a movie
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 on the television at home
provide
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 more comfort and economically cheap, but the popularity of the
theaters
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 will remain in future as these places are more enjoyable and fun.
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