Some people believe hat scientists have the greatest influence on the world. Other people, however, think that the influence of politicians is greater. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is currently an ongoing debate about the influence that
politicians
and
scientists
have on the world. Some people think that the former
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more likely to determine the way we think in general, whereas some others believe that the latter
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the biggest impact
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the population. There are several points that are for and against each position, but I believe that
politicians
are more
influencing
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in the way people think.
To begin
with,
politicians
usually appear in media channels,
such
as TV, radio and newspapers, giving the image that they are the
mane
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decision makers
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in societies.
In contrast
,
scientists
are often invisible to the eyes of society, despite having a profound impact on it.
Secondly
, scientific suggestions,
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in
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areas, are often criticised and questioned by a fairly high proportion of the population. On the other side, it is true that
scientists
can offer the world a good solution to most of the issues that societies are currently facing. A good example of
this
is the Covid-19 crisis, which has obliged many political figures to completely rely on scientist’s
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advice
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.
As a result
,
this
shows societies the influence that researchers eventually in governments and
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it makes people more likely to listen to their
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advice
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. As I have discussed, there are advantages and disadvantages to the topic.
However
, I strongly believe that
politicians
determine our decisions to a higher extent than
scientists
currently do.
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