There are more towns being built nowadays. It is more important to include public parks and sports facilities than shopping centres for individuals to spend their free time. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays more and more cities have been constructed which sparks a controversial issue of whether to include more public parks and sports facilities or shopping malls.
This
essay argues why it is more necessary for developers and engineers to construct both recreational centres and places for Linking Words
indiviuals
to shop.
Including more parks and Correct your spelling
individuals
sports
centres can foster Add a comma
,sports
bond
between a parent and Add an article
the bond
a bond
a
children. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Large
number of youngsters spend more amount of time playing either with their friends or with their father and mother. Change the article
A large
The large
Consequently
, a child's strengths and Linking Words
weakness
can be known to parents. Fix the agreement mistake
weaknesses
For instance
, after the construction of play areas in many parts of Canada, fathers spent more time with their Linking Words
offsprings
which leads to Fix the agreement mistake
offspring
formation
of an emotional connection. Add an article
the formation
Secondly
, Linking Words
health
of all the residents would be improved because better amenities are provided to them for running, cycling, swimming, so on and so forth. So, Add an article
the health
average
life span of a citizen and the relation between children and father mother is improved by developing Add an article
the average
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this
amenities.
Even though the benefits of parks are obvious, a town can never grow to Correct determiner usage
these
it's
full extent without shopping malls. Replace the word
its
Firstly
, youngsters, especially Linking Words
of
18-25 age, spend a large amount of time roaming in malls looking to purchase modern outfits. Capitalizing on Correct pronoun usage
those of
this
is very important to generate sufficient revenue. Linking Words
In addition
, before and after the construction of any commercial centre, employment chances for a resident increases. Linking Words
For example
, after the inauguration of Linking Words
EVA
mall, many native inhabitants were able to find a secure Correct article usage
the EVA
job
, which increases their living standards and eases tension on their families.
In conclusion, both shopping centres and recreational places are needed in order to generate more money, foster jobs, improve the physical well being of a citizen, and develop good bonding Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
in
between the members of a family.Change preposition
apply
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