There are more towns being built nowadays. It is more important to include public parks and sports facilities than shopping centres for individuals to spend their free time. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays more and more cities have been constructed which sparks a controversial issue of whether to include more public parks and sports facilities or shopping malls.

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essay argues why it is more necessary for developers and engineers to construct both recreational centres and places for

indiviuals

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individuals

to shop. Including more parks and

sports

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centres can foster

bond

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the bond

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between a parent and

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children.

Large

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number of youngsters spend more amount of time playing either with their friends or with their father and mother.

Consequently

, a child's strengths and

weakness

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weaknesses

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can be known to parents.

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, after the construction of play areas in many parts of Canada, fathers spent more time with their

offsprings

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which leads to

formation

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the formation

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of an emotional connection.

Secondly

,

health

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of all the residents would be improved because better amenities are provided to them for running, cycling, swimming, so on and so forth. So,

average

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life span of a citizen and the relation between children and father mother is improved by developing

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amenities. Even though the benefits of parks are obvious, a town can never grow to

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full extent without shopping malls.

Firstly

, youngsters, especially

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18-25 age, spend a large amount of time roaming in malls looking to purchase modern outfits. Capitalizing on

this

is very important to generate sufficient revenue.

In addition

, before and after the construction of any commercial centre, employment chances for a resident increases.

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, after the inauguration of

EVA

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mall, many native inhabitants were able to find a secure

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, which increases their living standards and eases tension on their families. In conclusion, both shopping centres and recreational places are needed in order to generate more money, foster jobs, improve the physical well being of a citizen, and develop good bonding

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between the members of a family.