Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

Computer
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is the most wonderful invention of the modern world and young children are more attracted towards them. Like every other modern
technology
computer
also
has its own merits and demerits. But I feel advantage or disadvantage depends upon how we are using the
technology
and for what purpose the
computers
are used.
Firstly
,
kids
use
computers
for playing video
games
, programming and now a day’s their schooling is on
computers
. Since pandemic
kids
are using
computers
or
laptop
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laptops
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to attend their school for 4-5 hours daily and after that
also
they have to
use
computer
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the computer
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for
home work
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.
Yes
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,Yes
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there are disadvantages
for
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using
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a computer
the computer
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computer
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computers
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or any
technology
as their screening
time
increases which can have
negative
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a negative
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effect on their health, but using
computer
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a computer
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or laptop is far better than watching TV or playing video
games
on
mobile
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the mobile
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phone
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phones
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as
kids
waste their
time
for
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unwanted activities. In today’s competitive world
computer
knowledge is
must
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a must
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and it increases their thinking ability.
Kids
learn
programming
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to program
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and
by
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playing intellectual
games
will increase their thinking ability. Like many
advantages
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,advantages
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it
also
has disadvantages like
kids
spent
their
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most of
the
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time
on
computers
and don’t involve in any physical activities. They don’t talk much or open up with their parents, if they meet any of their cousins in
family
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the family
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gathering
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gatherings
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also
they either talk about IT
technology
and they just sit quietly.
For instance
, I remember one
such
incident, my kid love
computer
programming and we have enrolled him
for
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coding classes where they were teaching him to develop
games
. He got so involved in that, he
use
to spent most of his
time
doing practice and don’t like to get involve in physical activities he started spending less
time
with his friends. So we made him understand and put
time
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limit for using
computer
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the computer
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. To conclude, every
technology
has its own advantage and disadvantage but it depends on us how much and for what purpose we
use
it. If we
use
it to gain knowledge rather than playing
games
it is always an advantage.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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