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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. DO the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Over the past decades, it has been observed that electronic
books
 have become a major reading device. As
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technology
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 increasingly prevalent, its downside has turned out to be
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 heated debate. While its shortcomings may deserve public attention, we should acknowledge that e-
book
 usage has become an indispensable inseparable part of our lives. The related drawbacks of using e-
books
 are exposed in various forms. Some
book
 lovers argue that if people read through an electronic device, the experience of reading
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 a paper
book
 will be lost diminished. To be more specific, the smell of new
books
, the texture of paper
books
, and the feeling of turning pages contribute to the understanding of literature.
Furthermore
,
although
 some e-
book
 products, take Kindle as an example, are able to download enormous
books
 that are
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, they still ask for the initial cost of acquiring a suitable device.
Hence
, reading electronic
books
 in lieu of their paper forms is not applicable for all bookworms.
However
, numerous e-readers think that contrary to popular belief, e-
books
 are more convenient to carry out and they have been enjoying
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easy access to a considerable variety of
books
.
For instance
, they do not need to carry several
books
 simultaneously time which is attributed to the fact that almost all electronic devices can download over 100
books
 on memory cards. In
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, ebooks can be more portable for those
book
 lovers to take.
In addition
, notwithstanding the small expenditure on membership of e-readers’ accounts, more categories of literature can be
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easily
 accessible in online
books
 shops, meaning that readers no longer need to search for a long period at length to find what they desire
books
. As a final remark, the electronic
book
 can bring problems and have its adversities effects on one’s reading experience as well as investment in
such
 reading devices. With that said, these issues cannot downplay the significant role of e-
books
 in the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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